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Post by Amry on Dec 6, 2004 18:18:57 GMT -5
Welcome, one and all, to the greatest rotten-fruit throwing fest of all time! Just kidding. This is the continuing saga of the Maiden in the Moon. A saga, for those of you who scorn dictionaries, is a story in verse. Such as the Odyssey or the Iliad. Therefore, mine will have chapters like a story. Constructive criticism is greatly appreciated and expected. Outright insults are not. Thank you. And now, without further ado... The Maiden in the Moon
Prologue
Where stars are bright and sun is dim and Earth is far away
Where Orion hangs his sword when he is resting in the day
Where time and space are nothing, and midnight's dark as noon,
There lies the silver palace of the Maiden in the Moon.
The halls are wide and softly lit, with chambers in between
No watching stars are thwarted by ceiling, roof, or screen
From deep within the palace can be heard the mournful croon
Of the woebegone lamenting of the Maiden in the Moon.
She sings her tragic story to the cold and silent night
Hoping one will feel for her and save her from her plight
But none will heed her pleading, for no one hears the tune
That tells the awful treason of the Maiden in the Moon. |
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Post by Kronomas on Dec 6, 2004 20:14:02 GMT -5
i loved the odyssey so i think i will enjoy tyhis lol
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Post by Amry on Dec 8, 2004 18:38:46 GMT -5
Thank you. ;D I loved the Odyssey too. *phew* I'm running out of rhymes for moon... yes, I KNOW room doesn't rhyme with moon! That's poetic license! Chapter 1
Before she was imprisoned in the silence of her bower
She kept for weary travelers a warm and merry tower
Until the fateful evening when a wandering thief called Ruun
Laid eye upon the beauty of the Maiden in the Moon.
He saw her noble posture and the silver of her hair
Her smile when she saw him was too much for him to bear
In madness Ruun retreated to the shadows of his room
To plot his secret capture of the Maiden in the Moon.
He asked the blessing of the stars to light his way that night
He was wraithlike in the corridors, a fearless, pruposed wight
As he crept into her chamber, he murmured to her, "Soon,
You will be my very own, my Maiden in the Moon."
He did not bind or beat ger, but brought her up from sleep
And told her "Maid, I hav not come to rob this merry keep
But to take you if you'll have me - I am the robber, Ruun,
But I could not steal a treasure like the Maiden in the Moon."
The Maiden looked into his eyes. True love was burning there
He had not fallen into love for eyes or silver hair
She felt herself return his love; sank in a joyous swoon
The robber's words had won the heart of the Maiden in the Moon. |
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Post by Kimnas on Dec 13, 2004 6:04:40 GMT -5
My Goodness, I never knew you were so good at poetry dear Amry! I will definately enjoy this!
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Post by Kronomas on Dec 13, 2004 21:38:06 GMT -5
i love it... ;D
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Post by Nick on Dec 14, 2004 5:55:56 GMT -5
Your ability to make a story flow so easily yet rhyme at the same time is amazing!
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Post by Amry on Dec 15, 2004 19:00:38 GMT -5
[glow=pink,2,300]Thank you! My muse has taken an unexpected vacation to Burmuda, but should be back soon. She will continue with the story then. *pokes muse*[/glow]
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Post by Kimnas on Dec 17, 2004 14:33:48 GMT -5
*Pokes Amry*
"Your buddy icon scares me..."
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Post by Amry on Dec 23, 2004 11:25:26 GMT -5
Sorry... it isn't my fault! How was I supposed to know there would be "sexy" in big letters underneath it??? But I've grown sort of attached to it, so...
My muse is back! But she's being lazy. Should have some more tomorrow. I pwomise.
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Post by Nick on Dec 24, 2004 1:32:11 GMT -5
Good, tomorrow = good for more poetry
I dunno why...but it's good.
Of course everyday is good...
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Post by Amry on Jan 4, 2005 10:58:52 GMT -5
Ha! Sarah finally stopped tapping her chin with the pencil and wrote another chapter! Or part of one, anyway.
And yes, I KNOW I said tomorrow two weeks ago.
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Post by Amry on Jan 5, 2005 18:37:31 GMT -5
I fianlly did it. I wrote three more stanzas (each takes me between ten and fifteen minutes). The third stanza in this post went awry. For some reason I just could not make it work. I knew what I wanted to say, but couldn't find the rhythm. I might rewrite it later, though. And Nick, if you think the plot is getting too inappropriate for this site, then just say so. About "predestined" in the second stanza: I needed some synonym of "inevitable" that fit the rhythm, but that was all the thesaurus yielded. So, it wasn't foretold or anything, just bound to happen when they don't get married and she's really pretty. Chapter 2
They lived together happy in the Maiden's tower inn
Ruun had found contentment in a life unbound by sin
"The stars will bless our union when we marry someday soon
Ah, life could not be better!" sighed the Maiden in the Moon.
And yet, they did not marry, put it off for long and long
They were living in their dreamworld, like two sweethearts in a song
And so it was predestined that the lustful eye of Ruun
Would see again the beauty of the Maiden in the Moon.
The stars will bless a marriage made in honesty and love
A tested, true commitment rains down goodwill from above
But incest is disgusting, and though this was known to Ruun
He could not leave the chambers of the Maiden in the Moon. Read the exciting conclusion to the chapter next time on: [bThe Maiden in the Moon[/b]! |
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Post by Nick on Jan 15, 2005 6:08:54 GMT -5
Interesting, good poetry. Yeah, the content is bearable. Just don't get too graphic ya know?
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Post by Sareae on Jan 18, 2005 20:16:09 GMT -5
I won't go into detail. I figure everyone here can put two and two together. And she has the kid.. *oops* Never mind... heh heh...
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Post by ChibiChrissi on Jan 23, 2005 18:35:17 GMT -5
Wow. Beautiful. The poem flows so well, and it's so creative! My poems always sound corny and messed up... but your poetry is perfect. Wow.
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